Feedback: My roommate helped me with recording my last Elevator Pitch. One piece of constructive criticism he had was to hone in on what I wanted to say beforehand. Essentially to master my speech so that I didn't waste any time saying "umm" or other noticeable pauses. The biggest thing to remember is being clear and concise, you don't want to simply throw a bunch of information at the person and hope some of it sticks. He also added that I should enunciate more, which I tried to improve upon this time around.
Based on the feedback, I tried to do a better job making a first impression. Volume and eye contact are two key factors to consider when communicating face-to-face, which was somewhat difficult to gauge when speaking into a camera.
Hi Greg
ReplyDeleteWow your roommate gave you some really good feedback. Those were the problems I felt when I checked my pitch video, too. I felt so awkward that all that came to my mind was that I wanted to finish the speech quickly. About your ‘umms,’ those are the easiest problems to fix with enough practice. If you’re standing in front of a bunch of investors, I’m pretty sure you would’ve be more prepared so no worries!
Greg,
ReplyDeleteI thought your elevator pitch was well rehearsed and outlined everything about your company very well. I liked that you were standing up and talking to the "crowd", and really saying why you were targeting certain areas of the market over others. In your next elevator pitch, you should just try to rehearse a little more so the video flows smoother and you don't have to pause for long stretches. If you do that, I think you will be just fine.
Greg,
ReplyDeleteI loved the introduction to your elevator pitch. It really grabbed the audiences attention and made them curious as to what you were going to be talked about. I agree with your roommate in that if you rehearsed a little more it would decrease the amount of times you said “um” and any other long pauses. I also struggled with these too!
Hi Greg,
ReplyDeletethis time around your elevator pitch was much improved, good job! You set the context great while explaining how universal sports are to cultures all over the world. I agree with the others that after a few more times of running through the pitch you will be able to eliminate the long pauses and filler words. Keep up the good work.