Feedback: My roommate helped me with recording my last Elevator Pitch. One piece of constructive criticism he had was to hone in on what I wanted to say beforehand. Essentially to master my speech so that I didn't waste any time saying "umm" or other noticeable pauses. The biggest thing to remember is being clear and concise, you don't want to simply throw a bunch of information at the person and hope some of it sticks. He also added that I should enunciate more, which I tried to improve upon this time around.
Based on the feedback, I tried to do a better job making a first impression. Volume and eye contact are two key factors to consider when communicating face-to-face, which was somewhat difficult to gauge when speaking into a camera.